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completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job.On the other hand other people think that getting experiences and developing soft skills is more important .Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #experiences #skills
Although
 it is believed by some that being a college graduate is
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they
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 key to securing a better job while others opine that possessing
a good interpersonal skills
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 and
experience
 are necessary to obtain work.In my
opnion
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opinion
,I consider that higher education enhances the chances of professionally settling down easily due to having more proficient and detailed
knowledge
 of subjects. On the one hand, the predominant
reaon
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reason
 people claim that it is more essential for a placement to have a college
degree
 and I agree
,
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is that having a tertiary education can put a person ahead of any other individual in the era of extreme competition.
In other words
, as along with
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 foundation of academic
knowledge
,many universities
also
 organise workshops and training placements
as a result
 after finishing
degree
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 not only they have academic
knowledge
 but
also
 a certain amount of
experience
 while training.
For example
 , for a doctor, lawyer and
enginer
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engineer
, one must have a university or college
degree
 to practice in
thier
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their
the
 fields.Thereby, pupils can feasibly attain jobs in
their
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 designated areas of their profession as they have both bookish and practical
knowledge
 owing to
university's
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 organised curriculum.
On the other hand
,others think that certain skills
such
 as
experience
, communication and
team work
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is
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 considered more beneficial.As
,
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practicing
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 these skills can make an individual more confident and know-how to handle
work related
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work-related
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 tasks more conveniently. In
this
 context , a well-experienced individual can easily comprehend the issues, can act as a good leader and bring significant
knowledge
 from a long worked
experience
.
For instance
,
sales person
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salesperson
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 having
an
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experience
 of many years will be aware of all tactics which a successful company requires.
Therefore
, for a thriving company, they need someone who has all these qualities. In conclusion, whilst many people vary in their opinion,I think that people with graduation
degree
 are able to succeed in
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 long run owing to their bookish
knowledge
 and
on campus
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 training.
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