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completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job.On the other hand other people think that getting experiences and developing soft skills is more important .Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #experiences #skills
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Although
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 it is believed by some that being a college graduate is
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they
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 key to securing a better job while others opine that possessing
a good interpersonal skills
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 and
experience
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 are necessary to obtain work.In my
opnion
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opinion
,I consider that higher education enhances the chances of professionally settling down easily due to having more proficient and detailed
knowledge
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 of subjects. On the one hand, the predominant
reaon
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reason
 people claim that it is more essential for a placement to have a college
degree
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 and I agree
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is that having a tertiary education can put a person ahead of any other individual in the era of extreme competition.
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, as along with
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 foundation of academic
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,many universities
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 organise workshops and training placements
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 after finishing
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degree
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 not only they have academic
knowledge
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 but
also
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 a certain amount of
experience
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 while training.
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 , for a doctor, lawyer and
enginer
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engineer
, one must have a university or college
degree
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 to practice in
thier
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their
the
 fields.Thereby, pupils can feasibly attain jobs in
their
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 designated areas of their profession as they have both bookish and practical
knowledge
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 owing to
university's
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 organised curriculum.
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,others think that certain skills
such
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 as
experience
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, communication and
team work
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is
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 considered more beneficial.As
,
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practicing
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 these skills can make an individual more confident and know-how to handle
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 tasks more conveniently. In
this
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 context , a well-experienced individual can easily comprehend the issues, can act as a good leader and bring significant
knowledge
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 from a long worked
experience
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.
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,
sales person
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salesperson
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 having
an
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experience
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 of many years will be aware of all tactics which a successful company requires.
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, for a thriving company, they need someone who has all these qualities. In conclusion, whilst many people vary in their opinion,I think that people with graduation
degree
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 are able to succeed in
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 long run owing to their bookish
knowledge
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 and
on campus
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on-campus
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 training.
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