Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. Discuss both the points and give your opinion

In many co.operate sectors employees are open to sharing their opinion with their bosses on any particular issue, to produce a good outcome. But unfortunately, some people argue that taking decisions is the only responsibility of the team's head. In
essay, we will discuss both the view and I will articulate my opinion over
To begin
with, teamwork is very crucial for any
to grow.
every member of an institute has an equal right to express his/her professional ideas. An individual cannot be always perfect in making decisions. If only the manager should make a
regarding the
's concerning issues, he might get fails sometime to take the perfect
will create the essence of dictatorship in a group.
, if an association is open to every employee to share their perception, it will help an employee to think more creatively.
help in creating various innovative ideas around the
's culture. Employees will always stay motivated as they are free to express their views.
On the contrary
, many people believe that manager has only the rights to take the
. Because many staff member may have not a good relationship with their
, so they may try to give a false
to remove their grudges. While managers are more experienced than the employees and he/she know the
better than workers, so it's better to take
by the manager himself. To conclude, in my opinion, there should be freely given to co-workers to share their ideas. Managers should listen to every member
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but should take a
on their own by listening to everyone's advice. Because working in a team is always beneficial, but taking decisions should always be the responsibility of a leader.
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