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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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 education plays a vital role in anyone's career. Nowadays, a large
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 of graduate are taking admission for their study at
University
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 compared to previous times and some people argue that Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject.
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, I oppose
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 viewpoint. In the following essay, I will be explaining my views on the same.
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, it is not practical for any educational institution to admit an equal
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 of male and female students. The subjects that are preferred by the male are generally different from the female.
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, most of the female
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 prefers fashion designing and due to
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 reason
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 of women taking admission to
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 course will be significantly higher than men.
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, the male
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 prefers to opt for mechanical engineering in comparison to a female
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. In
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 a scenario asking the institution to admit equal numbers of male and female students would be foolish. If universities force impractical criteria of admitting an equal
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 of male and female
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 universities would run out of business because no one course will be the
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 inequality. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
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 believe that it would be unfair to base admission to
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 courses on gender. Criteria for selecting
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 should be on the basis of their merit and not because of their gender. In conclusion,
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 education is important for both male and female but admitting them in equal proportion is out of question practically as well as socially.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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