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Some people believe that travelling alone is the best way to experience a country or a culture. Others feel that it is better to travel with people you know. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Debates for travelling safety with our selves or with
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a known
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person
 is uninterrupted topics. Never the less, to explore any
country
 has its own pros, travel with
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a known
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person
 has its own advantages. In
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 essay, I discuss both views and
finally
 form my opinion as per my nation. On the one hand, some people opine that travelling alone is the optimum way to experience unknows
culture
 of
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country
 by arguing that it individual is alone, there is no need to think for anybody
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 our selves.
Hence
, he or she can observe the diverse customs and give time
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 positive and negative sides to draw
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 as well as compare it with his/ her
culture
.
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 an example,
individual
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an individual
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 can learn all the surroundings including dress, talking style and many more by some time asking
to
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local
person
 as per the requirement.
On the other hand
, there is
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 benefit to accompany
known
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a known
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person
 or family member
although
if
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 will increase the overall expenditure of
tour
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. Because if
individual
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an individual
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 goes with
relative
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, he can discuss all the observation of particular
culture
 simultaneously and investigate the unknown things by two
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 which can
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 to both of them understand the
country
 in depth.
Also
, they can find
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 way in
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 situation. To conclude, I think that if Individual need to explore the
culture
 with taking good and bad experience, much better to travel alone. And if
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 to spend
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time in
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another country
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country
with
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enjoying the local
culture
, that
person
 can take
company
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a company
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 of
family
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a family
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 member to make
memorable
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a memorable
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 staying if there are no
any
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financial restrictions.
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