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The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that
governments
 allocate too many economic resources to
space
programs
 which could be more beneficial if used in vital public sectors
such
 as health and
education
. while I believe
education
 and health are very important, I completely disagree with cutting down
space
programs
 budget in order to be spent on schools and hospitals. One on hand, it is true that the
governments
 should spend more
money
 on
education
 and health. The reason is that not enough people are getting proper
education
 and medical services are too expensive for the majority of people. The quality of these vital public services could be increased by allocating more annual budget to these sectors.
For instance
, at the beginning of the COVID pandemic
governments
 spent a lot of
money
 on research institutes to develop a vaccine. The countries that succeeded to build a vaccine have much lower death rates now.
On the other hand
, the budget of the
space
 program mostly goes into funding various new research
programs
 to develop new technologies. Many of the technologies that we use today have been developed during the cold war when the united states and Russia spend a lot of
money
 on their
space
 missions. GPS,
for example
, was originally build to compute the position of satellites in
space
. I believe
governments
 should continue to fund
space
 projects because not only it will result in new technologies but
also
 will enable new possibilities and capabilities for humans in the future. In conclusion,
space
programs
 are crucial for the future of humans and the
governments
 should spend as much
money
 as
it
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is necessary for these
programs
.
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