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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the coming years, with the advancement of new techniques and types of equipment each day, it's very true that
pollution
 is going to come under control.
However
, I believe that
technology
 can only guide us. We as
humans
 , it's our responsibility to take precautions in order to save the
environment
. Today, the world is facing a scarcity of
freshwater
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. With technological advancements , we can use filters to purify
the
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polluted water but that's ,not the solution to save the
environment
. People have to take measures to save water for the coming generations. The air has become very polluted because of excessive use of
vehicles
 , ACs , etc. We can keep air purifiers to clean fresh air in our homes but
this
 is not going to help in reducing
pollution
.
Pollution
 can be controlled by using fewer
vehicles
 and promoting eco-friendly solutions like using cycles to go to the office. So,
technology
 can just act as support in reducing
pollution
.
Humans
 have to play their roles in saving the
environment
.
On the other hand
, It is the
technology
which
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 has developed many advanced motor
vehicles
 which have made it possible for everyone to afford
vehicles
. Another example is the use of smartphones. More than 95% of world
pollution
 carry smartphones which have affected the
environment
 badly. While
technology
 is causing
pollution
,
humans
 can reduce it by taking measures
such
 as planting more trees, avoiding using
vehicles
 everywhere etc. To conclude, no doubt
technology
 can help in solving environmental issues but
first
humans
 have to take steps to control
pollution
 in order to solve environmental issues
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