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Learning English at school is often seen as more important than learning local languages. If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion, is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we try to ensure the survival of local languages, and, if so, how?

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Introduction
As we know
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,
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english
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 is an international
language
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 and it is spoken all over the world.
Now a days
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english
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 has been a compulsory subject in schools
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 because if it is not taught at
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 age, students will find
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 of problem in practical life. In my opinion, it's important to learn at
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 age.
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 the importance of learning
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english
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the english
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language
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 is that all internet, social media, digital media is mostly in
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english
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language
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 and if one can not understand it, how would he be able to keep
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himself
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After that, it is
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 important in businesses area as well. Many of the top
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 companies that are running, and even private companies as well,
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english
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language
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 as a way of communication and with the help of
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 you would have more chance to get a job opportunity.
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, there are so so many students who want to study abroad but almost all top Universities from well know countries for education like UK, USA, Canada and Australia require an
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 certificate to apply for
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admission.
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, if someone wants to study remotely like online courses or degrees, they can not pursue it without having the knowledge of
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english
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language
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.
Conclusion
To sum up, it's very important to teach
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language
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 at
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 stage, because there are so many things that would be able to create problems at some point
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 children's practical life, either if someone is willing to travel, apply for a job or wants to study abroad.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global communication
  • economic opportunities
  • cultural diversity
  • endangered
  • linguistic heritage
  • inclusive
  • multilingualism
  • language revitalization
  • language policy
  • language preservation
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