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Some people believe that government money should be spent on important things than arts such as painting and music. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #arts #music
The
governmet
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government
 has many
responsibilty
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responsibility
 to
nation
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the nation
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 to support the
people
 living in the country.In
this
case
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 I partially agree that
government
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the government
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 will
spent
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spend
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for
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it for
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 the purpose of arts.As
government
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the government
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 has
the
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a
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 major role in society definitely authorities cannot
be avoid
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avoid
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 the expenditure belongs to
arts
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the arts
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.
This
 essay will discuss the
importants
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importance
 of
spenting
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spending
money
 for certain reasons. On the one hand,the
money
belongs
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that belongs
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 to
government
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the government
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 is not for a particular person or for a special reason.
This
amount
 has been contributed by the country
people
 as paid by tax
amount
.Normally
this
 contribution will use for
the
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public usage
in particular
 for the construction of road,monuments,public toilets
such
 as many other uses.
However
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 in some special
circumstances
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,circumstances
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 the
govenments
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governments
government
 may have to
spent
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spend
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money
for
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on
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 the arts and academics.
For
instance
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government
 would conduct some public exhibitions to help the needy
people
 in the nation in
such
 cases the expenses have to paid by the
government
 itself.These exhibitions may be part
for
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of
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 the
developmet
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development
 of
under
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privilaged
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privileged
people
.
This
also
 coming under
government
 responsibility.
On the other hand
,
definitely
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goverment
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government
 is not allowed to
spent
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spend
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 the
money
for
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on
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the
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unnecessary events.Even if they spent for any particular reason the authority should provide the information regarding the expenditure to the public.To get know by the individual is the right of each person living in a
republc
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republic
 independent nation.
For instance
recenlty
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recently
 American president Donald Trump
visted
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visited
 India,
deu
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due
 to that visiting
ceremoney
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ceremony
 Indian
government
 has been spent a lot of
money
 to hide the reality of
country
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the country
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.
Definitely
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 the authorities should follow the protocols of visiter
however
this
amount
 has not been published yet to the public.Most
of
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the
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people
 are not aware of what is happening around them. To summarise,it does not matter
government
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the government
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 is
spenting
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spending
money
 on what, but it has to be beneficial for the public and for the
people
.Because
this
amount
 what they spent
is not belongs
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does not belong
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 to any of particular individual
furhermore
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furthermore
 it is saved for
special
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a special
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 purpose.There are many needy
people
 living
in
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the
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worldwide,at least
this
amount
 would help them it must be
greatful
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grateful
 for
many
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any
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 individual living in the streets.
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