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The use of personal cars has increased more than ever before but this use of cars causes many problems. What are those problems? In order to reduce these problems, should we discourage people to use cars? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge

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There has been a massive surge in the
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 of personal
cars
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recent times.
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 it provides
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various benefits
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 as travelling with
comfort
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 it simultaneously causes various complications. Traffic congestions and environmental pollution are the most significant problems. We can curb the
usage
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 of personal
cars
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transport connectivity and raising the taxes to an unimaginable level. One of the primary issues of using a personal car is
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 in traffic congestions. These congestions kill the valuable time of an individual which can be
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 used for creating something productive.
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, environmental pollution levels have increased at an alarming rate.
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 is because of the fact that vehicles emit carbon monoxide which in turn destroys the environment thereby, creating an imbalance in the ecosystem. Climate change has already taken a huge leap in affecting our lives through our improper use of resources and it is terrible to know what
usage
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 of
cars
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 on a daily basis do to the environment. The problems faced by the ever increased
usage
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 of
cars
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 can be reduced by improving the transportation facilities available to the public. With enhancements to the frequency of services available especially during the peak hours it drastically brings down the
usage
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 of private
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, another viable solution to the problem is to increase the taxes on purchasing
cars
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fuel. By increasing the taxes on purchasing
car
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a car
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 it would create an impact that would deter any
middle class
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 people from using or driving
cars
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. In conclusion, to reduce
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 impacts that
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 create
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 the environment restricting the
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 may not seem to be an optimal solution,
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, it is essential for manufacturers to initiate ideas to develop
environmental
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 friendly
cars
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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