Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

The graph illustrates
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the number of
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who
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travelling to a particular
Carribbean
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and the survey was done between 2010 and 2017. Overall, most of the public resided on cruise
ships
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island
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years. To add more, least of them resided on cruise
ships
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island
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a minimum total which was 1
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the highest total which was 3.5
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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