Nowadays, families are not close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to it. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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Interaction has been the prime factor for socialization for ages. Lately, the communication between the families is becoming fierce and a lion's share of the people are getting used to it. Globalization and westernization should be blamed for
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will come to a conclusion. Since, the jobs are so demanding these days, that both the parents' father and mother have to work to meet the financial requirements of their family.
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their children nor for socialization.
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their homeland and they realize any loss because they are getting rewarded in monetary terms in their salaries.
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people who have a strong bond of kinship enjoys various benefits of it.
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if you have a couple of good friends who understands you.
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to it, if parents need help to take care of their children in their absence, grandparents are the best people as a caregiver. Offsprings will be in safe hands and will never feel lonely and will get full love and warmth which they deserve. Suffice to say, despite the monetary gain and freedom to make decisions, I firmly believe that families should keep a healthy relationship with each other, so that they stand by the other if, anyone is in need of any help.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Social media
  • Face-to-face interaction
  • Geographical mobility
  • Generational differences
  • Individual independence
  • Personal growth
  • Mental health
  • Well-being
  • Family bonds
  • Cultural traditions
  • Familial support systems
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