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Imagine that a company plans to build an industry in your hometown. Discuss the factory might improve your community. Do you favour or oppose to build in your community. Give reasons and examples.

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Globalization requires the growth of factories in both urban and rural areas. It is argued in my hometown whether the industry should be built because of its long-term effect on the environment.
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, I consider that the advantages that companies bring for locals would outweigh the disadvantage.
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 essay will discuss two following reasons for my choice with a concrete conclusion. On the one hand, industrialization contributes to the development of my hometown’s economy.
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 to the profit from agriculture, authorities should take advantage of building factories to expand the earnings. An illustration of
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 is that in 2020, my hometown's GDP is just approximately 20% but it is predicted that GDP might reach nearly 40% in 2021 with the advent of companies.
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, if some locals still remained conventional thoughts about the industry, it would be more difficult for gaining a high economic rank, compared to other provinces and cities.
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, building companies create a variety of jobs for the locals. To be honest, my neighbours could earn their livings just by working all day in vast open fields or by selling goods; the unemployment rate relatively increases in recent years. These problems could be solved by allowing to construct factories, they provide a wide range of works for not only the young but
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 the elder with stable income.
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, tackling unemployment will lead to the deduction of crime and social evil- hot-debated issues in my hometown in the present. In conclusion, I have a tendency to believe that factory construction would bring benefits to both economic and social.
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, some negatives effects
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 as polluted fumes into the air or water could be resolved by a strict ban from authorities.
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, people should feel comfortable in industries and receive good opportunities to attain a high living standard in the near future.
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