With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitats an some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

There is no doubt that poaching and forest destruction have impacted
animal
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population negatively.
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essay will explore why I believe that preventing these species from
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extinction
is of utmost importance and
also
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propose
purpose
some methods to mitigate
this
issue. One of the chief
resaon
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reasons
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why
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, why the endangered animals require protection,
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the
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endangered animals require protection is
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to maintain an ecosystem cycle.
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,
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herbivores
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is dependent on plants for food supply which are later consumed by a carnivores species ,
this
will balance the lifecycle of natural
habitants
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habitats
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. If any amongst
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of animals are on the verge of extinction than it may disturb the process of holding every natural components
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together
which is ultimately required to maintain nature's wellbeing.
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, it is cruel to destroy these creatures and one should always emphasize
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preserving their lives
instead
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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