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Some people think that best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others , however, believe there are better alternative ways of reducing crime. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #crime #prison #sentences #alternative
There is one thing
which
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 can
seen
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 everywhere,
crime
 - it may be
low intensity
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crime
 or Heinous
crime
. Some proportion of masses opine that best way to handle
this
 is to send
criminals
 in prison for
long
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a long
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 time
, ;
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,
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 others opine that other alternative ways decline
crime
 more efficiently. Watch the arguments
need
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that need
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 scrutiny before forming an opinion. Long prison sentences are the best way to teach offenders.
Firstly
,
those
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for those
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 who are thinking about committing crimes,
this
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good
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well
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will
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 act as
lesson
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a lesson
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 for them.
For example
, sending home Fernandez in
the
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jail for
long
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a long
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 period for small crimes than others think twice before committing any
crime
. Apart from
this
, if
criminals
 are sending to
the
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jail for
long
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a long
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 time, there
are
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is
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better
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a better
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 opportunity to re-educate them.
However
,
crime
 should be eliminated from
the
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society
not
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,not
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 the
criminals
.
First
 of all the character of criminal will not improve,
because
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 the mix with other
criminals
.
Therefore
 rather than sending them for longer sentences, the focus should be on developing good alternatives.
Hence
, it may improve their character. In my opinion, it is important to focus on alternative methods but it should be restricted to hardcore
criminals
 and heinous crimes. In conclusion, there are arguments not only in
the
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favour
for
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of
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 long prison sentences but
also
in
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apply
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against the same .
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