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In many country, women are allowed to take maternity leave during the first month after birth of the newborn. Do you think that the advantages of the maternity leave outweigh its disadvantages?

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Through the initial month of
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 a
baby
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,
women
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 have had the authorization to take maternity leave in several nations. The
time
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 after birth
a
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 newborn is critical for the new family because
women
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 have a plethora of events to deal with.
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, as a natural order of things, mom and
baby
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 need to be together about the importance of the development of family ties. The advantages of these moments outweigh her career and the disadvantages that may come out. It is possible for her to start over or to be rewarded for her exceptional job. After
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 a newborn,
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 became a
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 and needs to face a plethora of new that came with motherhood,
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 as breastfeeding any
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baby
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 needs, changing diapers, try to sleep while
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baby
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the baby
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 is taking a nap in order to
recovering
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 energy. The
first
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 month is about change mom's and family's live thoroughly and their need
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 to be used to it. In a
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 moment,
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 and offspring need their
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 to increase their ties and kid's confidence.
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, it is of pivotal importance that
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mother
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 bears in mind that maternity leave is crucial in these periods. As a mammal, a newborn requires breastfeeding and the
mother
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's milk is absolutely the best nourishment for
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baby's
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the baby's
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growing
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.
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, there are
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 who decided to not breastfeed their children, and it is all right. The main concern is about the connection
that is
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 about to be developed between them and for
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, to be at home, without being worried because work,
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. In conclusion, from my perspective, take maternity leave has more advantages than disadvantages. To illustrate it
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,
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childhood is a short period of a kids life and there is no reward.
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 all the tiredness, all those moments will turn into astonishing memories, if lived properly.
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