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Do you agree or disagree that improvements in technology reduce the role of olympic games?

#improvements #technology #role #olympic #games
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Nowadays
people
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 plays the role in
Olympic
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 sport are decreased due to
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 of technology increases rapidly, I completely agree with
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 statement and will discuss more in detail later.
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 world
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 of the technology so children and young family sitting in front of computers and playing
video
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 play most of the time, non-focused on
Olympic
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games
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. ,
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 parents not doing anything with
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, indirectly parents are encouraging
video
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games
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. So physical activities are not happening,
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people
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 not interested in a physical sport.
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 due to COVID 19 schools are shut down, so students are stick to online classes or virtual classes.
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 one of the reasons for sitting on
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games
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 of physical
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. If students willing to play
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games
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, they will the
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 of physical activities, unite with other national
people
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. In conclusion,
people
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 more interested to play
video
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games
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instead
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 of physical
games
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 like the
Olympic
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games
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. In my opinion technology
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 should be limited and more focus on physical
games
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.
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