The number of people who are interested in and wearing fashionable clothes is increasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

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people
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with trendy wardrobe are trying to outnumber non-fancy individuals. Anyway, if we live with
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trend right now, we have to understand if it is beneficial or not? On the one hand,
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of fancy clothes production is going to ruin the industry of comfortable, but not trendy dresses, in case they won’t follow the trend.
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, we can feel the negative impact on them already.
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it is a better choice for companies to care about how attractive and up-to-date
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model looks,
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of concernings about
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and the quality of tailoring.
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, benefits are more obvious, poor
people
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today
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can wear classy jeans and T-shirts
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because
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growing interest
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of competition on the market, prices will decrease .
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, if
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is affordable for almost everyone, we will have
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problems with social stratification, especially at schools and colleagues.
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shops
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can support
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with stylish looks not only without overuse of rare resources on production
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but
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with
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spendings for customers
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conclusion,
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the benefits
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outweigh the drawbacks, and if the number of well-dressed
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grow
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and at the same time they are able to save more money and have less social pressure, it will have a positive impact on our life at all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • modernity
  • versatility
  • practicality
  • Western media
  • fashion industry
  • widespread adoption
  • professional settings
  • preservation
  • cultural diversity
  • cultural integration
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • unique cultural identities
  • expression of individuality
  • innovative
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