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The number of people who are interested in and wearing fashionable clothes is increasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

#people #clothes #development
Today
,
people
 with trendy wardrobe are trying to outnumber non-fancy individuals. Anyway, if we live with
this
 trend right now, we have to understand if it is beneficial or not? On the one hand,
growth
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 of fancy clothes production is going to ruin the industry of comfortable, but not trendy dresses, in case they won’t follow the trend.
Furthermore
, we can feel the negative impact on them already.
Today
 it is a better choice for companies to care about how attractive and up-to-date
this
 model looks,
instead
 of concernings about
material
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 and the quality of tailoring.
On the other hand
, benefits are more obvious, poor
people
today
 can wear classy jeans and T-shirts
,
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 because
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 growing interest
as a result
 of competition on the market, prices will decrease .
Moreover
, if
style
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 is affordable for almost everyone, we will have
less
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 problems with social stratification, especially at schools and colleagues.
For instance
,
mass market
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 shops
today
 can support
people
 with stylish looks not only without overuse of rare resources on production
,
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 but
also
 with
less
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fewer
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 spendings for customers
As
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a
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conclusion,
benefits
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 outweigh the drawbacks, and if the number of well-dressed
people
grow
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 and at the same time they are able to save more money and have less social pressure, it will have a positive impact on our life at all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • modernity
  • versatility
  • practicality
  • Western media
  • fashion industry
  • widespread adoption
  • professional settings
  • preservation
  • cultural diversity
  • cultural integration
  • cross-cultural understanding
  • unique cultural identities
  • expression of individuality
  • innovative
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