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Some think that young people should be free to choose any career they like, while others say that they should think more realistically about their future. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Choosing a
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career
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 requires careful consideration. While some
people
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 claim that adolescents should be able to pursue a
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 they would enjoy, others oppose that, arguing that teenagers should aim for a high-paying job in order to secure a livelihood when they grow up. Given that our life consists of more than just physiological needs, I strongly believe that it is vital to fulfilling one’s potential in the
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 fields that are most compatible with their interests. The youth who choose highly skilled
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 may find it easier to have a fruitful
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 in a materialistic sense. It is true that some professions,
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 as engineers or doctors, are well paid and offer more stability compared to work in other, non-professional fields.
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, psychologists usually have higher starting salaries compared to artists; they
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 rarely lose their
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 in recessions.
People
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 who prioritise earning a living might agree that a reliable job is a must for their
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 and by no means will they take risks to gain employment in a field they are passionate about, that doesn’t pay well.
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, it is worth remembering that we are living in a rapidly changing world and the concept of a ‘guaranteed
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’ is unrealistic. Even the smartest of us aren’t prophets and it is impossible to foresee many changes in job markets in the
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; some high-salaried
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 of today may no longer exist by the time our young
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 become adults.
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,
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 may choose to pursue their dreams and follow
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 paths according to their passions and interests now, to avoid having regrets later in life. Having considered the reasons to prefer monetary remuneration over one’s interests, I am convinced that it would be a pity for youths to limit their
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 choices to highly paid
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 of today. Unforeseen changes in the
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 markets may affect salaries but won’t change the pleasure one derives from doing something they love.
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