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Should the international community do more to tackle the threat of global warming?

#community #threat
In many parts of the world global warming is one of the most serious issues that people is facing today.
This
 can be seen in an increasing amount of radiation plants and abating the area of natural places as a forest. In my opinion, if the community want to avoid the impacts of global warming, they should look for reasons from aspects of the environment and ameliorate weakness sides
such
 as factories. My words will be proven by analyzing the media and statistics.
Firstly
, it must be recognized that
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 every factory absolutely does harmful output consisting
such
 as
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 Carbon dioxide and other radiation chemical wastes. Caspian Sea’s fishes and seals which were found in the dead form because of oil plant’s waste play a good example here.
This
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 the global warming issue can only be solved when the "balance between humanity and nature" is restored.
Thus
, it must be concluded that the international community should continue their movements.
In addition
 to
this
, Equator forest and other types of forest’s area become decreasing.
This
 is evidenced by BBC’s statistics as every year the scale of global forest falls by 10%. When looking at
this
 example, it is obvious that the community wants to defeat the harmful impact of global warming whilst their deeds make them confrontational effect. Overall, I think the most vital thing is to never stop the struggle with
this
 problem. To conclude, after analyzing the above, it must be concluded that we need to use everything consciously given to us by the almighty to tackle the threat of global warming.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • threat
  • international community
  • tackle
  • pressing issue
  • global collaboration
  • action
  • cooperation
  • root causes
  • neglecting
  • responsibility
  • catastrophic consequences
  • efforts
  • combat
  • inspiration
  • further action
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