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Teenagers are spending an increasing amount of time on the internet, and this is having a negative effect on their social skills. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is true that the
internet
 nowadays
have
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such
 a significant impact on
the
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human life
especially
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 with
teenagers
. The youngsters today tend to spend too much time on the
internet
 for a lot of personal purposes. While
i
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 agree with the idea that the net would have detrimental effects on
teenagers
, I do believe that cyberspace could
also
 bring benefits for youngsters if they use the web in the right way.
One
 the
one
 hand, there are a variety of reasons why
teenagers
 can be harmed by the
internet
.
Firstly
, spending too much time would lead
some
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 serious consequences for them. Youngsters would become addicted to some types of social network
such
 as Facebook of
Instargram
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Instagram
 easily
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 leads them will be no longer be aware of the realistic of the world
surround
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.
Secondly
, the
internet
also
 influences negatively
on
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the study performance of students at school.
For instance
, Minh, my close
frend
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friend
friends
, has been banned to go to school for three days because he had expressed
such
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rude behaviour with his teacher on
facebook
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Facebook
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. That why lots of parents in my country now are starting to prevent their kids from
suffing
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suffering
surfing
 the net
One
 the other hand, we can not deny
benefits
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 that the
internet
 brings for us
by
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 some compelling reasons. Cyberspace is an unlimited source of information that
allow
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allows
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teenagers
 to broaden their knowledge efficiently.
Moreover
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 young people are able to make new friends through
the
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social media that could help them improve their confidence and complete interpersonal skills. In
additionly
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addition
, with the adverse situation of the covid pandemic, study online is
one
 of the most
esstential
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essential
 and efficient solutions for students not to forget lessons they had been
taugt
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taught
 at school. In conclusion, it is certain that the
internet
 could result in some unexpected consequences for
teenagers
, but
this
 by no means the net is
indespendable
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indispensable
 for adolescents because of its outstanding achievements
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