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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television can not replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#children #time #television #book #tool #well‐educated
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no social consensus can
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 most of them say that using
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 which is children are less well‐educated today. I totally agree with
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TV
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 that with examples of The United Education Centre report and professor Jan Danilov's research. The
first
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television
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 reading
books
 have a negative development is that children are less well‐educated today.The United Education Centre report says that the level of pupil's knowledge decreased by 5% every 10 years. So,
this
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this
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 using
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instead
 of
books
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books
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television
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 Danilov studied how children are learning
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information from different sources, and he came to
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 that pupils learned information from
books
 faster than from
TV
 shows. Provided that, I think
television
 can not replace the book. In conclusion, I totally agree with
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 statement. I think when
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television
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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