Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television can not replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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that pupils learned information from
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television
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational tool
  • Documentaries
  • Passive consumption
  • Critical thinking
  • Imagination
  • Attention span
  • Literacy skills
  • Screen time
  • Parental guidance
  • Digital materials
  • Interactive learning
  • Multimedia resources
  • Cognitive development
  • Reading comprehension
  • Balanced approach
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