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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
In
this
 modern era
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media
 play a pivotal role in everyone's
life
. According to my point of
view
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this
 statement is true some celebrities treated badly by the
media
 because some of the channels make fun of their personal issues which
is
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 not good . so , In
this
easy
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 I wanna explain both
positive
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the positive
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 and negative points of
media
 with different instances . The
first
 and foremost point is that
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all famous people have their own
life
's . Everyone's
life
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lives
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have
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 both ups and downs . Nobody is
their
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 who don't have problems in their
life
 . Problems make the human
more good
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better
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 and help them to fight with issues and became a famous or positive person. Along the lines of that
media
 take shorts and put on the social sites with bad headlines which make the person back and all the people make fun of them .
Furthermore
, some of the stars like to share their personal
life
 on social
media
 . And they put their videos on social sites to make some followers and likes on their videos.
For
instance
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 they show how they live in their home .
Their
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 is one show Bigboss in which they show their lifestyles and daily routines
this
actively
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 demonstrates that they like to share their privacy on social sites. To sum
up
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everthing
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everything
 that has been stated so far celebrities have their own likes and dislikes some of them like share
evertyhing
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everything
 and some of them like to be personal
stuffs
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stuff
kinds of stuff
pieces of stuff
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 only for them not for
the
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social
media
 . so ,
media
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the media
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dont
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don't
 need to make fake news or headlines
of
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about
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anybody's
anybody
anybodys
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anybody's
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 personal
life
.
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