Governments spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals. Some people say that the government spends too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things. Do you agree or disagree?

Public celebrations and holidays,
such
as New Year or
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Victory day need too much
money
for their organization. It is argued, whether
this
is useful and right or power should spend
this
money
on other things. From my point of view, people are right. Thereby, I absolutely agree, that
money
must be spent on the more essential things.
Firstly
, it is very unjustified costs, because they do not bring any use to people. Of course, it may be funny and entertaining, but the costs are too large for it.
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, only the
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fireworks in Minsk cost $100.000. I guess
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this
sum is enough to help 2 or 3 sick children with their medical treatment.
That is
why
,
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government
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the government
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should rebuild
it’s
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financial
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system and find out, that shows are not worth kids’ lives.
Finally
, medicine is not the only thing that
need
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money
. Education, transportation and so on need investing as well.
For instance
,
this
$100.000 would be a great capital for the new students’ books or innovational buses for the public. I believe it is
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more useful and
long lasting
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investment than
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festival organization.
As a result
, the quality of life would rise and people will be happier. To sum up, public celebrations are not a good way to spend national
money
. In my humble opinion, medicine, education and other important things are the better way for
this
. I definitely think that government must stop organizing these expensive events, and should spend cash more carefully.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allocate funds
  • cultural heritage
  • national pride
  • balanced approach
  • stimulate local economies
  • social cohesion
  • fostering social harmony
  • opportunity costs
  • address crucial issues
  • effective governance
  • public funds
  • overall societal benefit
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