IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 2.5

Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

#country #language #information #features #comparison
This
 diagram provides information about the differences that have been captured at West
Park
 Secondary
School
 since the year 1950 till 2010. From the
graph
Add a comma
,graph
show examples
 it can be seen that West
Park
 Secondary
School
 was close to a block of houses.
However
, more and more facilities
were build
Change the verb form
were built
show examples
 over the years but the main road
didnt
Correct your spelling
didn't
 disappeared. In 1950, the
school
 had a huge playground for
the
Change the word
their
its
show examples
 counterparts. On the left side, houses were built so parents could bring
there
Replace the word
their
show examples
 child easily to
school
. Opposite the residence, there was
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
farmland and in the
northern
Add a comma
,northern
show examples
a
Change the article
the
show examples
 main road was been made, which was
next
 to the
school
. As can be clearly seen from the graph, the houses
has
Change the verb form
have
show examples
 been removed in 1980.
Instead
 of that, they made an extra science block and a small car
park
 so the mothers and fathers can
park
 their car quickly
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 while dropping
of
Replace the word
off
show examples
 their youngsters.
Furthermore
, the playground remained the same size but the farmland converted into a
sport
Change the noun form
sports
show examples
 field. Luckily, the road was still in place. In the final, the
school
 car
park
 showed a
subsequently
Replace the word
subsequent
show examples
 increase in size.
Therefore
, the
sportfield
Correct your spelling
sportsfield
sports field
sport field
 and playground
Correct your spelling
sprinkled
shrinked
Correct your spelling
shrank
show examples
 in dimension.
Moreover
, the buildings and the main
roas
Correct your spelling
road
roads
 have remained unchanged.
Submitted by rehanauddin9 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: