Many high school students take part time jobs. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

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many cultures, adolescents are encouraged to
work
part
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time
. But
this
is a phenomenon
that is
not universally encouraged, as many people feel
such
an arrangement has drawbacks.
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essay will look at the advantages and disadvantages associated among
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with working high
school
students
. On the one hand,
students
who
work
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time
gain business exposure and learn to handle money.
For example
, companies like McDonald’s often hire high
school
students
to
work
their front cash registers. For these young adults, they are learning both how to deal among
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with people in a professional way and how to transact money. As these sorts of
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abilities are not taught in schools, it is clear that several advantages derive from
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towards
students
working
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time
.
However
,
on the other hand
,
students
who choose to
work
during their high
school
years spend
time
away from their studies and may be exposed to dangerous situations.
For instance
, I remember as a student once working by
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within
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in a restaurant in an underdeveloped
part
of my city. The clientele often had serious personal problems,
such
as drug and alcohol addiction. To make matters worse, I worked so many weekly hours at
this
restaurant that my
school
grades started to suffer. As
this
experience shows, there are several disadvantages that can befall working
students
. Following
this
look, it can be concluded that
part
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time
work
among
students
should be engaged on
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by a case-by-case basis. So long as a working arrangement does not infringe upon a student’s safety or their grades, it is recommended that
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time
work
be pursued by
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to all adolescent people
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