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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #attention
It is true that advertisements are becoming useful and successful to let
people
 purchase the products, while other
people
 tend towards the
view point
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 that advertising is very widespread and there is no need
of
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 it. In my point of view, I would have to support the idea that advertising is important and it is doing great with
people
 to buy anything. On the one hand, there are clear arguments that advertising is a beneficial way to make
people
 purchase. One of the main reasons can be that advertising about any product gives vast information about it with several features
such
 as the colour, the taste, the uses, the smell and more. The
second
 reason could be that televisions are the popular means of modern devices in our developed world, and it is the major source of advertising for decades.
This
 means that all
people
 could watch the advertisements via TV.
For instance
, the advertisements
of
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 food goods on television may provide the customers with various details about
it's
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 shape, so they can remember the product while buying it.
On the other hand
, it is often argued that in
fact
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 advertising is already common.
People
 usually have
this
 opinion because they believe that social media replaced
the
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advertising. The main reason behind
this
 is that
people
 nowadays are interested in smart appliances than advertising. A particularly good example here is that online stores can provide
the
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information about the goods without advertising them on many sources. To sum up, while
people
 may vary in their opinions, I believe that advertising
lead
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people
 to buy anything.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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