Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Affordable health
services
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are the foremost priority of any government to maintain the well being of their own citizens. Though, some
services
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are expensive to avail
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to the costs incurred for
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of the art technologies. I completely believe that authorities should
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bear
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the cost and provide
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without charging a single penny.
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, unemployed and aged care citizens might need
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in
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accessing
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due to the high costs involved.
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, if some has been out of work
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for
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a long period of time and needs urgent medical
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it is quite difficult for him to pay for the
services
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due to his ongoing problem.
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, with aged
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it is imperative that governments protect them with utmost care as a part of their well being by not asking them to fork out money.
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,
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advancements in the medical field incur
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of expenditure it is the prime duty of concerned authorities to protect their own people.
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, access to
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free
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should be prioritised. There may be an increasing number of people looking to benefit
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option,
however
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,
attention
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should be given
those
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to those
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who need immediate
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.
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, in any
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critical emergencies
such
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as heart, and
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diseases should be placed on priority leaving others non prioritised. People ailing
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such
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diseases need higher focus and access to special
services
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and treatments.
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,
managements
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management
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should make these
services
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free of cost and limit the patients due to
execessive
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excessive
costs involved. In conclusion, despite the
upgradation
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up-gradation
of
services
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and treatments to save the lives of human
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it is important that governments should fund and support
health
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the health
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care system for the welfare of their own nationals.
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