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Children prefer to study online. What are its advantages and disadvantages?

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The Internet has become an essential part and parcel of every students’ lifestyle. The majority of children prefer to educate online which have both pros and cons. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument. One of the most significant benefits of studying online is easy accessibility with which students can access their study material at remote locations and need not be present at school.
For instance
, whenever a student travels to some other location than his school, with online access, he can still continue with his studies which
otherwise
 would not have possible.
In addition
, the internet is having a wide variety of study material available because of which students need not worry about having books with them.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages of online studies. Web-based education is not good for your health. To illustrate
this
, during exams students devote long hours studying on computers, which makes their lifestyle sedentary that has great effects on their eyesight. Inconclusion, whereas online studies are more convenient, there are health issues associated with
it
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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