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many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course in university education. others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. how far do you agree or disagree with the above views.

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does not depend on university studies, but it mainly depends on what kind of job you went to join and be a part of it. Even the people who had a higher education certificate ,
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 need to training through their study years. which means in my opinion, that there is no statement better than others. At the beginning point, academic studies are a must in many fields of
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 basic science, medicine,and law.Because if someone planning to be a doctor there is noways to be except the university degree, owing to the fact that doctors should know each part of the body before they begin to treat any organ has a problem. By the same token, a lawyer can not defence of accused without knowing the laws and rules regional and international too. From the other point of view, go to
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 after school has many benefits, like experience and mixed up quickly with society. Nowadays there are many fields of
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 that does not need a university certification.
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, handmade, marketing, and all designs types which contain a lot of kinds the most popular kind of digital design we see
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every minute we spent on apps.
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