In same countries, owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

Many
people
give the place where are living a signification value
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so that they prefer buying to ranting home. It seems to me
that is
a positive statement from the investment side and safety.
First
and foremost reason from owing a house
people
do not require to pay rent every month from their salaries in order to that they will have more financial stability,
then
they do not fear from resigning and moving on to another job whatever the salary will jump or not.,
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people
will have enough mental space to think about how to invest their salaries
for instance
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market, building or in establishing a startup business. owing to that,
people
owing
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their homes in early age better for them.
Lastly
and most importantly, safety and the word carry two meaning: The emotional one considered as memories and the systematic one.
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we will talk about memories
people
hardly make memories or special occasions in the place they never stay in it for a long time unlikely in their own homes not only with family members but
also
with every stuff they bought for their homes like chairs for balcony or sweety floor lamp to the living room. Owing house comfort
people
from move suffering each time they change their accommodation. All in all, where are
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people
live can affect their life and their responsibilities. Personally, I feel that the most satisfying place for the person who's own the house.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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