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Some people think that students should only study with those who are at the same level of intelligence. However, others argue that it is better for students to study in an environment of mixed abilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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People have different views about which is the better way to classify
students
 into classes based on their intelligent levels. While many believe that
students
 with
same
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 level should study together, others think an environment of mixed abilities
students
 has
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 impact. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views of the issue and state my opinion. With groups of
students
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 the same level, tailor-made curriculums will be created to suit
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students
' needs and abilities which can make enormous strides in their study. At the same time, it
save
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 time, effort and energy for
teachers
 while attending classes.
However
,
students
 in that kind of class will lack
of
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elements of positive
competion
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competition
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 appreciable factor
encouranges
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encourages
 them
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 progress.
On the other hand
, having
students
 with different levels in a classroom improves their motivation, pushes them to take more ownership and have more
involment
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involvement
 in how they learn. In mixed-abilities class,
students
 tend to learn and compare themselves with classmates to improve their weakness and perform better. But
this
 method requires
teachers
monitor
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 each individual's progress carefully and pay attention equally to
students
. Without
teachers
'
thoroughtness
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thoroughness
,
students
 may feel neglected and
sufer
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suffer
 from peer pressure. In conclusion, it is hard to clarify which kind of classroom is better for
students
. But as far as I am concerned, I prefer a class with
students
in
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 the same level of intelligence because
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 advantages for both
teachers
 and
students
.
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