In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

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There is no doubt that in some nations the average
weight
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of the people is rising may
causes
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decreased
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a decreased
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level of fitness and
health
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. The sedentary
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lifestyle
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and
food
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habits are the main reasons
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problems.
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, changing
food
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and doing regular
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may solve
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issues. The vital cause of the obesity of the population which may lead to several
health
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difficulties is eating habits. Nowadays, most of the residents of the countries work outside of their home for a long time.
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, they do not get enough time
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food
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at the home.
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, they
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on
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ready-made
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contain
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high level
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calories and cholesterols which may
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weight
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gain. Another reason is doing less physical activities.
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, people complete their work sitting on the chair using the laptop that discourage them
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from going
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outside and doing
exercise
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regularly. That’s why, they become obese resulting
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in several
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health
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issues like high blood pressure, Diabetics etc. To solve
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this problems
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avoid packaging ready
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and take daily physical activities. Generally, factory-based
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contain high cholesterols and preservatives. The cholesterols increase the deposition of fat in
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body
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the body
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lead to
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a rise
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rise
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rising
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weight
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in weight
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, and some preservatives
causes
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cause
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for
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apply
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some
health
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difficulties. So, changing
food
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pattern may help to reduce
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weight
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the weight
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gain process of
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body
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the body
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.
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, regular
exercise
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keep
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body
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fitness and help to burn deposited fat of the
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.
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, 30 minutes
walking
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of walking
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everyday
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can balance
blood-glucose
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the blood-glucose
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level in human. In conclusion, taking daily
exercise
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and avoiding factory-made
foods
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help to maintain good
health
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and to keep fitness.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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