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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?

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These days, technology has been developed rapidly and one of the most significant inventions might be electronic money and because of that, many people bring a mobile phone
instead
 of a wallet. In the following essay, I will discuss that
although
 there are some advantages, the development of the system of payment by cellphone apps have more disadvantages.
Firstly
, the advantage is its convenience. When the consumers use electronic cash, things that they need for shopping would be just a cellphone and it is tremendously helpful because people
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nowadays always have their mobile phone;
therefore
, wallet apps allows them to buy things anytime.
Secondly
, the disadvantage is the problem of security. As cash exist virtually, the risk of hacked by someone or system error will be higher;
thus
, using virtual money have more risk to lose properties.
Furthermore
, people have knowledge of how to protect actual money
such
 as keeping
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 storage;
however
, as electronic cash is
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 thing, it is more difficult for users to manage.
Lastly
, the other disadvantage is that paying by apps will not work always. In
this
 world, there are many kinds of
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 disaster
such
 as earthquake, flood, and typhoon and some times those interrupts the supply of electricity. In that situation, the products cannot be bought virtually so
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society will be in
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. In my conclusion, while
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convenience is the advantage, the disadvantage will outweigh
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 of the security problem and the limit of the situation that could be used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • security
  • time-saving
  • cashless transactions
  • dependence on technology
  • privacy concerns
  • accessibility issues
  • financial vulnerability
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