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Some people think technology makes life complex, so we should make life simpler without using technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 consider that
technology
 has made
people
's
life
 difficult so it is better
to
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not to use it. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement because it has made
life
 easy and united
people
.
Firstly
,
technology
 has made
life
 easy by reducing physical efforts at difficult jobs. Labours had to carry heavy loads at construction work. Automated machines that carry
heavy weights
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 had made
such
 work easy.
Further
, housewives used to wash clothes
by
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 their hands but now they can easily wash these in washing-machines.
For instance
, in
warehouses
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 automated machines load heavy products earlier men used to perform
this
.
Hence
,
technology
 has made difficult jobs easy.
Secondly
,
technology
 has connected
people
 through social media. Now they can share thoughts and ideas
to
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 their closed ones. They can stay in touch with relatives and friends.
This
 all is feasible due to
technology
.
This
 has become a medium to exchange thoughts. Humans need to be social to feel relax and better. Social media platform helps them to stay interacted.
For instance
,
a
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recent research stated that social websites help
people
 to fight against the sense of
lonliness
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loneliness
. In conclusion,
technology
 has made
life
easy
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 not complex. I disagree with
this
 statement that
this
 should not be used because
this
 made difficult jobs easy and connected
people
 globally.
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