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It is the duty of governments to protect children's health by fighting obesity. The government should implement laws against sugary drinks and fast food restaurants and take other measures as well. Do you agree or disagree with the statement.

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There is nowadays a growing concern regarding obesity, especially in youth.
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, some people advocate governments ought to make laws against sugary drinks and fast
food
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 establishments as well as take other steps to fight against obesity and protect
children
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's well-being since it is their responsibility. I believe,
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, that it is a
parents
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' and schools' duty to educate
children
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 about
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 issue because teens spend more time at home and school. As teens consider their
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' role model, it is a
parents
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' responsibility to teach their offsprings about a healthy diet as well as about their well-being.
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 is because not only do
children
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 spend more time with their
parents
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 ,and they often copy their
parents
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' actions so, if
parents
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 eat unhealthy
food
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, their offsprings surely eat the same
food
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. Take an example of
parents
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 who consume pizza with high calories every day,and their kids
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 think of it as regular healthy
food
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, thereby consuming it as well, so
children
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 often inmate the habits of
parents
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 and will do same in the future. In order to keep
children
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 healthy,
parents
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 should eat healthily.
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, it is a
parents
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' duty to protect
children
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's
health
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, not the government.
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, schools can
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 educate their pupil about their
health
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 since
children
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 spend 7 to 8 hours in school. Having a physical education course in school makes
children
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 more conscious
about
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 their well-being. In conclusion, taking care of
children
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health
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 is not a governments' duty, but it is a
parents
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' and educational institutions responsibility to make
children
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 aware of their
health
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity epidemic
  • preventive measures
  • public health policy
  • nutritional standards
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • dietary habits
  • health incentives
  • junk food regulation
  • childhood obesity interventions
  • consumer behavior change
  • food labeling laws
  • caloric intake reduction
  • nutrition education
  • parental responsibility
  • health promotion strategies
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