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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different culture and ages together. To what extent do you agree or dis agree with this.

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It is important to consider whether
music
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 is
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 path to bring individuals from various cultures as well as ages together or not. Many masses argue that
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 is not crackerjack to mix different communities. But, I
am totally agree
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 with the given statement. In my opinion,
music
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 has its own language which attracts every person who is
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music
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 lover.
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 with, our world
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 multitudinous sounds in every part. Numerous traditions have their own
music
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.
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,
people
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 from dissimilar
culture
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 cannot understand another
culture
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's
music
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but
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, they can feel the message of the
songs
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.
This
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 is the
specialty
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 of
music
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. It has
their
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its
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 own way to connect oodle of communities with each other.
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, Sidhu Mossewala is a Punjabi singer and he
sing
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songs
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 in
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Punjabi
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punjabi
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the punjabi
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 language but we can see on Til-tok and on other musical platforms that
people
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 love his
songs
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 from foreign countries as well as they dance
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 his
songs
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. There are enormous examples which
shows
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that
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how unrelated
culture
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 attached with one another with the help of
music
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.
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, every masses from every age group love
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. It is
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 undeniable that the old
songs
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 are preferred by the grey hair generation whereas, modern
music
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 is liked by youngsters. But some kind of
songs
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 that are equally indispensable for all generations plus vanish distance in ages.
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That
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are
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 our religious,
petroit
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Detroit
patriot
petrol
songs
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.
Such
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 as, Jan Gan Man is the national anthem of India. Every age group
sung
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this
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 song with
same
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the same
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 enthusiasm. To conclude, some
people
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 may vary in their point of view but I think,
music
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 plays
paramount
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 role to attach
people
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 of ages and
culture
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 with each other because it has their own feeling and language.
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