The scientist believes that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it is positive while others think it is a negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion

Researchers are tempted to believe that
computers
will outsmart
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human intellectual capability in the near future.
Although
, some people suggest that
this
could have
catastrophic
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outcome
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personally think that the
development's
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developments
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will only help mankind to do better.
To begin
with, the evolution of
computers
have
benefit
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many industries lately. Computer operated
nano robots
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have helped to conduct delicate brain surgeries and tissue development's which would have wasted hours of valuable time of doctors.
Secondly
,
computers
have revolutionized the
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industry by helping pilots to solve complex calculations and saving many lives by avoiding accidents.
In addition
to
this
, the Covid-19 pandemic which shock the world would not have seen light at the end of the tunnel if not for
computers
when it comes to finding a vaccine.
Finally
, it is evident that these improvements have benefitted mankind enormously.
On the other hand
, artificial intelligence
have
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isolated
the
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human intervention in some avenues. The
deffence
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defence
industry
have
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seen breathtaking, but worrying features
such
as
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drones which will go to
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target and blast by
it self
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without considering the
collotarel
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collateral
damage.
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Furthermore
,
this
has
pave
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the way for biomechanical warfare, which can produce weapons of mass destruction
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can impact the world. On the whole, these implications can be resolved and ratified by the arbitration of global organizations
such
as
Uniter
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nations. In conclusion,
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even though
some people believe that the sci-fi myth of a doomsday can be a reality, the
moden
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modern
day technological advancements of
computers
will continue to benefit
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mankind in all areas to have a better life in the future.
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