It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantage of change outweighs the disadvantages?

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In the modern world,
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a new
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generation finds that
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are vital in one's
life
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while the old generation
people
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are more
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to the same conventional routines. I believe
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the advantages
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of having
changes
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in
life
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outweighs
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the disadvantages.
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, everyone
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some kind of different atmosphere from
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mechanical world so that they could relax for a period of
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. Most of the
people
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plan long trips in order to escape from the
frustruations
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frustrations
frustration
and tensions whereas other
people
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for family trips so that the whole family could have a good
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, a
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film star in India travels around one month every year
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his bike before he resumes his career, which provides
him
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more relief and helps him to conceive the character effortlessly.
Secondly
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,
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are essential even in the food we consume daily. Following the same diet for a long period of
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could make someone bored, so
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boredom could be discarded by adding and trying new types of food.
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, during the
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at the college, I used to try different dishes like Indian and Chinese in order to avoid the repetition in
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which gave me a pleasant feeling.
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, there are some disadvantages as well.
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, in business, for experiencing something different
people
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usually quit their jobs and try to be an entrepreneur as most of them regret taking
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decision in their
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later when they face challenges. Old
people
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discourage individuals
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taking risks in their
life
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and suggests
people
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to
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be satisfied with what they have received in
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.
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,
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would help them to get settled in their
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quickly
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than others. To illustrate, one of my
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colleague
colleagues
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started his own hotel as he was really fond of preparing and serving dishes, but had to sell his hotel due to the mismanagement of money. In conclusion, I believe merits far outweigh the demerits
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experiencing a change in
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even though some
people
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claim that
changes
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have detrimental effects on peoples
life
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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