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It is often considered that change is more beneficial to people than trying to avoid it and have everything remain the same. Do you think the advantage of change outweighs the disadvantages?

#change #people #advantage
In the modern world,
new
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a new
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 generation finds that
changes
 are vital in one's
life
 while the old generation
people
 are more
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 to the same conventional routines. I believe
advantages
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 of having
changes
 in
life
outweighs
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 the disadvantages.
To begin
 with,
firstly
, everyone
need
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 some kind of different atmosphere from
this
 mechanical world so that they could relax for a period of
time
. Most of the
people
 plan long trips in order to escape from the
frustruations
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frustrations
frustration
 and tensions whereas other
people
goes
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 for family trips so that the whole family could have a good
time
.
For instance
, a
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 film star in India travels around one month every year
in
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 his bike before he resumes his career, which provides
him
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 more relief and helps him to conceive the character effortlessly.
Secondly
,
changes
 are essential even in the food we consume daily. Following the same diet for a long period of
time
 could make someone bored, so
this
 boredom could be discarded by adding and trying new types of food.
For example
, during the
time
 at the college, I used to try different dishes like Indian and Chinese in order to avoid the repetition in
life
 which gave me a pleasant feeling.
However
, there are some disadvantages as well.
On the other hand
, in business, for experiencing something different
people
 usually quit their jobs and try to be an entrepreneur as most of them regret taking
this
 decision in their
life
 later when they face challenges. Old
people
 discourage individuals
on
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 taking risks in their
life
 and suggests
people
to
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be satisfied with what they have received in
life
.
As a result
,
this
 would help them to get settled in their
life
quickly
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 than others. To illustrate, one of my
collegue
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colleague
colleagues
college
 started his own hotel as he was really fond of preparing and serving dishes, but had to sell his hotel due to the mismanagement of money. In conclusion, I believe merits far outweigh the demerits
on
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 experiencing a change in
life
 even though some
people
 claim that
changes
 have detrimental effects on peoples
life
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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