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some argue that he quality of product is what matters while others suggest that products should be affordable. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Opinion
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The opinion
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 is divided among
consumers
 where
quality
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the quality
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 of
products
 is concerned. While some argue that it is the
quality
 of
products
that is
 important
hence
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the best
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quality
 raw material in manufacturing those
products
, I argue that it is important to have
products
 that are inexpensive and affordable which, in my opinion, would outweigh the
benefits
 of having premium
products
.
However
, there are considerable
benefits
 associated with
products
 that are durable which will
also
 be explained in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, as mentioned above it is mainly the price of the raw material that determines the price of a certain
product
. Even though
this
 harms the
quality
 of the
product
 which
subsequently
 affects its durability, there Is a major benefit that needs to be highlighted, which is, accessibility. Comparison of Apple and sony is an instance where the introduction of a competing brand that launched a
product
 with similar features
that
is
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are
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 inexpensive and
is
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are
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 available for an affordable price point.
Secondly
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,Secondly
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 the
benefits
 of
products
 that are expensive
such
 as the features and durability, and utilisation of premium material will allow
consumers
 to use it for an extended period as compared to competing brands which reduces wastage. An excellent illustration of
this
 is the vacuum cleaner brands Dyson and Phillips, where most
consumers
 hesitate to invest a sum of money on a vacuum but on the flip side
this
 could be a good investment with convenient features but unfortunately for a target consumer base. In conclusion, by considering the requirements of the
consumers
 it is crucial that
products
 are manufactured at affordable prices which can increase accessibility and encourage everyone to able to enjoy
benefits
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the benefits
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 of any
product
.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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