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Some people believe that too many resources and attention are devoted to the protection of wild animals and birds. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays some people argued that we are spending too much time and resources on protecting the
habitats
 of wildlife. I strongly disagree with the view and the two main reasons will be illustrated in the following paragraphs.
First
 of all, we have the responsibility to help wild species to rebuild their homes because human activities are the major factor in the destruction of wildlife
habitats
.
Otherwise
, some endangered
animals
 will lose their home and their life.
For example
, as we are producing a large amount of marine debris by using plastics
such
 as plastic bags, all species of sea turtle are suffering by eating them, which causes blockage in their intestines. The earth
is not only belong
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 to human-beings and so all
animals
 have
right
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 to live
in
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on
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 the planet.
Thus
, we must devote much time and money to conserve the homes of wild
animals
.
Secondly
, it is no doubt we spend much time and money on protecting wild species, but
this
 is not
waste
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 of recourses.
Conversely
, we are on the right track if more and more people pay attention to
this
 sever issue.
This
 is because it demonstrates human still kept humanity and morality.
Moreover
, the resources we are applying is not only protecting wildlife
,
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 but
also
 saving our own home. If we don’t take any actions, now we are destroying
animal’s
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an animal’s
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 living environment but in the near future, there is no suitable place for us
o live
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olive
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. At that point, will you still think we put too
much
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many
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 efforts
on
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into
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 preserving
animals
’
habitats
?
Therefore
, we should work harder to protect wild
animals
 and birds. To conclude, we should continue to contribute more to save
animals
’ land because we are the one destroyed their
habitats
 and we need to take the responsibility to rebuild their homes.
Besides
,
this
 is not wasting resources.
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