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Job training is far more important than broad-based education.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Knowledge
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 and skills both are equally important for
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 employee. Practical as well as theoretical
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 is essential to fulfil the
job
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 requirement. Some people argue that
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 training is more effective than
education
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,
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 many pupils refute
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. Well I do not totally agree with the statement as “Training and
education
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 has a vital role in employment The internship is an essential part of higher
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 training helps the person to
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 skills in a particular field. student
gain
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 theoretical
knowledge
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 in college or university but practical skill can be
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 during the internship.
Education
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 teaches them “what the
work
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 is?” and by , the training they learn “how the
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 is to be done?” For instant-Students of the medical field cannot perform treatment on the basis of books they studied, practical experience is needed to conduct their
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.
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Job
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 training increases the importance of our
education
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. In spite of that, many people argue that
education
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 can establish a strong foundation for students and prepare them for any type of
work
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. Broad-based
education
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 can make individuals well capable in all aspects and develop their ability. Students not only
gain
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knowledge
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 of a particular subject as well as they learn different activities during their studies.
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- a graduate accountant can
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 as a sports coach because he is excellent in sports in school time.
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 broad-based
education
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 alone can make a person well worse to perform different jobs. In conclusion, after the evaluation of both views, it has refuted that
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 training and
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 both are interconnected as they complete each other. Practical skills are given more important in today’s market but it cannot be denied that broad-based
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 provides several employment opportunities.
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