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What are the benefits of living in big cities,as opposed to rural areas? What are the problems of rural areas, and how can they be solved?

#cities #areas
There are certain incredible benefits of residing in a commercial area like; access to basic amenities
such
 as clean water, affordable housing, improved healthcare,
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 education, better employment opportunities. These, become a positive influence on a person’s life and
further
 motivate them to strive for greater achievements as compared to living in an underdeveloped place. Rural
areas
 lack basic amenities and offer fewer opportunities
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 employment but
this
 can be tackled by investing
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 these underdeveloped
areas
. The main problem faced by rural
areas
 is the lack of infrastructure and basic amenities.
This
 brings about poor living standards,economic deficit,increased unemployment rates and poverty. In a community where there is an absence of these
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 factors, the inhabitants are less motivated to do more with their time and can
therefore
 succumb to the abusing of drugs, alcohol and indulgence in prostitution.
This
 ultimately increases crime and violence rates. Take
for example
 in a developing country like Nigeria, to date ,there are various
areas
 in Nigeria that are classified as rural communities. It has been recorded that diverse abominable acts occur in these places like cultism, rituals that
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 killing people, recreational drug misuse, prostitution and sex trafficking to name a few. The solutions to these problems are many and some are, proper sensitization to these
issuesand
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issues and
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, funding by the government to create infrastructures and provide employments, providing incentives for the youths as
this
 would encourage them to go back to school or picking up manual paid labour.
Also
, providing subsidies on housing, healthcare and education.
Furthermore
, by providing bore-hole systems for clean water, opening food banks with affordable and nutritious meal options, empowering men with farmlands for agricultural purposes, empowering women and youths with various crafts and tools,
for example
, providing sewing machines, tools for farming, wheel barrels for transportation of products from one place to another . To sum it up, rural
areas
 can contribute greatly to the failures of a country but when the appropriate infrastructures are provided they can transform into positive contributors
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 of the economy.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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