Children in some parts of the world have less responsibility compared to children in the past. Some people think as a positive change, however, others think of it as a negative. What do you think?

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In the modern world, parents tend not to involve their
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in taking responsibilities. While some
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some affirmative effects, others think the opposite. In my opinion, I think it would have some adverse effects on the young generation.
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with, if a child is brought up in a less responsible manner, it would have negative implications in their personality and later it would become hard for them to change it by the time they realise.
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, giving more
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would enhance their self ability to face and tackle challenges that they have to face
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in their life.
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, the young individuals in western countries
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earning at a very young
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to have their own pocket money for their needs which creates an inspiration to grow whereas young
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in countries like India tend to leave their parents only by the
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of thirty.
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, parents have to take initiative to make their
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responsible.
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, young
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are more immature than the
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in the past and
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would eventually affect their
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capacity in a bad way
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because they would struggle at the time of taking important decisions where they have to take risks in life.
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, it would affect their mental health as well when they come across difficult situations.
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,
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who had taken over the family businesses find it impossible to manage
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a huge
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responsibility
in most of the situations, so in these
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they should have given and learnt about it at an early
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. One of the finest
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is the case of Kingfisher, where Vijay Mallya had to sell all his properties because his son could not manage the whole entity by himself.
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, his empire got bankrupted and he had to leave the country. In conclusion, I believe, in the past, duties were given at the
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of adolescence which were not only businesses but
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household chores and
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,
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could have helped to avoid lots of problems which are seen in the new generation, so I would like to recommend
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to introduce new job programs where
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could do at an early
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