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Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home, and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this will be a positive or negative deuelopment?

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In recent times, computer technology
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 become increasingly popular, and
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 likely more affordable and accessible
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, it is suggested that adults would be able to
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, and the
children
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 would be able to study from
home
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. I think
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 is a positive development because it enables both parties to
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 and study in a relaxed environment. Technology has made our lives considerably easier due to
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 efficiency and constant upgrades. With technologies becoming cheaper and accessible, jobs and education would easier to achieve.
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, due to the ongoing corona pandemic changes had to be made in our everyday lives and that included adults working from
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 and
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 attending classes online. Of
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 it was a big change from the usual but after some months of adapting to the new normal, more companies are beginning to offer some of their
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 the opportunity to choose where they
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 from. The same applied to students as parents had the opportunity to observe and make inputs on how their
children
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 learn.
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, if
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 becomes a reality, it would provide the opportunity of bonding of parents and their wards because
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 the parents normally spend considerable amounts of time away for
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, they tend to moss out on their
children
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's milestones.
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, working from
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 can provide
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 to the afore-mentioned issue. In conclusion, technology has become our saviour in many ways because of the new opportunities that are associated with
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 use. I am of the opinion that the advantages of working and schooling from
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 would influence our society positively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • increased productivity
  • reduced commuting time
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • lack of social interaction
  • potential distractions
  • limited access to resources
  • facilities
  • increased isolation
  • mental health issues
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