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Human activity has damaged the environment all around the world. Some people think that humans cannot stop damaging the planet where as other believe that we can alter our behaviour and prevent future damage. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The continual destruction of our
planet
 has been caused by
humans
. Some people believe
humans
 cannot stop damaging their
environment
 while others think that alteration in
behavioral
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 tendencies can prevent
further
 damage. In my opinion, I believe that the permanent destruction of our
planet
 can be avoided if
humans
 are dedicated to learning about and finding alternatives to problems affecting our
environment
. On one hand, our
planet
 earth has started experiencing some changes and
this
 is due to the fact that
,
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 some unavoidable factors have given rise to some issues
for
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 example, overpopulation and pollution due to toxic fossil fumes
have
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 affected the
environment
 negatively. In the past, the climate of various regions was predictable but these days meteorologists are finding it increasingly difficult to predict the weather changes accurately. A typical example of the effects of climate change occurred in the state of Texas in the United States of America recorded
their
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first
snow storm
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 in many years.
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Furthermore
, damages to the
planet
 have become unavoidable due to the
afore-mentioned
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 reasons.
On the other hand
, it is believed by many that,
conscious
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 effort has to be made to reduce the damages done to our
planet
 by
humans
. Protecting
of
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our
environment
 is important, meanwhile,
humans
 are capable of learning and changing
although
, there has to be
an
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 proper education about the benefit of safeguarding our
environment
,and incentives.
Furthermore
,penalties can
also
 be imposed for defaulters who do not adhere to the protection laws that can be put in place by the government. In conclusion, continual damage to our
environment
 can not be helped at times and
this
 is due to our usual way of life, but we as
humans
 can
atleast
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at least
, consider ways to minimize damages and protect our
planet
 even though, efforts are being made to make
planet
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 Mars habitable, we are not certain what the future hold is we
neglecte
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neglect
neglected
 our present .
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