The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

in the contemporary world the society witness obesity, which is gathering momentum.

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ten years, the number of overweight youngsters

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by 20 per cent. in

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am planning to find out the roots of

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phenomenon and look into what consequences to us

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suppose that there are several factors, which influence on developing obesity among young people.

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of all, it is dedicating

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more fast

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resturants

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restaurants

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macdonalds

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, burger king, pizza hut. these

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resturants

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try to give hard sells to people, placing adverts

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their products

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the web and tv. children are more exposed

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it than adults, as they

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to analyse it well and make their own decision.

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, if a famous

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promotes burgers,which

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sell,

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increases the chance of buying their products by children. another reason is processed

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. most children are lazy,

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do not want to spend their free time

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cooking as it is simpler and faster to go to the nearest shop and buy some

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, which can be heated in a microwave.

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, they can buy frozen pizza and get it

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after few minutes in a microwave.

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, with the development of the phenomenon, which is named

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obesity, our society can face awful consequences. the

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effect is cancer, as the overeating of

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type of

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can entail

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horrible disease.

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of future generation can decrease.

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, if you eat in fast

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resturants

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restaurants

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long period of time, you could die faster. in the conclusion,

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would like to state that overweighting is indeed one of the gravest threat, facing the modern world. when we visit fast

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resturants

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or buy frozen

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, we should bear in mind that it can be a cause of our death