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Should private schools receive government funding?

#schools #government
School provides a student’s
first
 exposure to the outside world and knowledge acquired at school has a huge impact on a child’s development. There are conflicting views on whether private
schools
 should receive
government
 funding just like
government
schools
. I strongly disagree with
this
 view and
this
 essay will discuss with valid arguments as to why
government
 funding is not required for private
schools
. Private
schools
 are known to have better infrastructure, better future opportunities and
well trained
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 teachers which in turn leads to
better
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a better
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 standard of
education
 compared to
state
 or
government
schools
. To provide all these facilities, they have
higher
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a higher
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 fees structure which only a certain group of
population
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the population
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 can afford.
For example
, CEOs of multinational companies can certainly afford
spending
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 on their child’s
education
 and so can celebrities.
This
 enables children of financially sound parents to receive good
education
 which makes them more successful in future. On the flip side,
government
 or
state
schools
 have to rely on
government
 funding for their day to day operations as they provide basic educational qualification to all people at
bare
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a bare
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 minimum or no cost at all.
For example
, children of
labour
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 class have to rely on
state
schools
 if they want to learn. In my opinion,
instead
 of funding private
schools
, the
government
 should increase funds provided to
state
schools
 so that they can appoint
better qualified
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 teachers and better facilities. There should be no disparity between
standard
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the standard
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 of
education
 and people from all socioeconomic classes can receive
education
 of the same standard. To sum it up, private
schools
 can function without
government
 funding as they charge a fee for providing
education
.
Government
schools
,
on the other hand
, provide free
education
 and depend on
government
 funding.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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