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Should private schools receive government funding?

#schools #government
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School provides a student’s
first
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 exposure to the outside world and knowledge acquired at school has a huge impact on a child’s development. There are conflicting views on whether private
schools
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 should receive
government
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 funding just like
government
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schools
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. I strongly disagree with
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 view and
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 essay will discuss with valid arguments as to why
government
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 funding is not required for private
schools
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. Private
schools
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 are known to have better infrastructure, better future opportunities and
well trained
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 teachers which in turn leads to
better
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a better
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 standard of
education
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 compared to
state
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 or
government
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schools
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. To provide all these facilities, they have
higher
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 fees structure which only a certain group of
population
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the population
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 can afford.
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spending
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 on their child’s
education
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 and so can celebrities.
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 enables children of financially sound parents to receive good
education
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 which makes them more successful in future. On the flip side,
government
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 or
state
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schools
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 have to rely on
government
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 funding for their day to day operations as they provide basic educational qualification to all people at
bare
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a bare
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 minimum or no cost at all.
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, children of
labour
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the labour
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 class have to rely on
state
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schools
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 if they want to learn. In my opinion,
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 of funding private
schools
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, the
government
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 should increase funds provided to
state
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schools
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 so that they can appoint
better qualified
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better-qualified
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 teachers and better facilities. There should be no disparity between
standard
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the standard
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 of
education
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 and people from all socioeconomic classes can receive
education
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 of the same standard. To sum it up, private
schools
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 can function without
government
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 funding as they charge a fee for providing
education
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.
Government
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schools
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,
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, provide free
education
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 and depend on
government
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 funding.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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