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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

#minutes #topic #computer #effects #children
We are living in the technology world at present. We use many gadgets like
Smart Phones
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,
Computer
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,
Laptop
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laptops
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,
Ipad
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iPads
 and many more in our
day to day
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 life. Using
such
 devices is equally important as we have made them
be
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our part of work and they are easily available to our
children
 at home as we are using them. In my opinion, it has a positive and negative
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impact on our
children
.
Our
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 current situation
due to
 Covid 19, learning online has been a necessity of
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society , where sending our kids physically to
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school is highly risky and
therefore
, the school board has taken a decision for online studies for all the students. In
this
 case, they need to do all the activities at home. To illustrate, they need to open spreadsheets, type in the
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, draw, take out the information through
google
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, make
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I found students are very much interested in handling the computer or laptop and learning new things every day.
This
 is definitely a positive impact of using
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computers or laptops. If we see the other side, many parents do not allow their
children
 to go outside and play,
mix
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or mix
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 with
other youngster
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another youngster
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; sometimes because of their work schedule or
some times
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sometimes
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 attitude.
Instead
 of physical sport, the parents approach smartphones, tablets, Ipads to the
children
 at a very young age to play some games and
then
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uncontrollable
to
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 them to avoid
these gadget
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this gadget
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. Some
children
 play computer games
at
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the whole night, they get lost
behind
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 the games and
it
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 leads them to
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 a serious
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decision
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they
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may commit suicide.
For example
 - some years back there was
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Online Game called "Blue
whales
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' and many students committed suicide
due to
 that game.
This
 is of course a negative part of using
these equipment
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. As per my knowledge and experience if we as parents give our proper time to our
children
 at their right age, keep up the bonding, regular talks with them, ease of using
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 and restricted time slots for it, more focus on physical activities and mix up with other
children
 will help to overcome the negative aspect of
this
 technologies.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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