You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on your children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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We are living in the technology world at present. We use many gadgets like

Smart Phones

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Computer

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computers

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Laptop

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laptops

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Ipad

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iPads

and many more in our

day to day

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life. Using

such

devices is equally important as we have made them

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our part of work and they are easily available to our

children

at home as we are using them. In my opinion, it has a positive and negative

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impact on our

children

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current situation

due to

Covid 19, learning online has been a necessity of

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society , where sending our kids physically to

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school is highly risky and

therefore

, the school board has taken a decision for online studies for all the students. In

this

case, they need to do all the activities at home. To illustrate, they need to open spreadsheets, type in the

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, draw, take out the information through

google

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, make

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etc

where

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I found students are very much interested in handling the computer or laptop and learning new things every day.

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is definitely a positive impact of using

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computers or laptops. If we see the other side, many parents do not allow their

children

to go outside and play,

mix

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with

other youngster

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; sometimes because of their work schedule or

some times

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sometimes

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attitude.

Instead

of physical sport, the parents approach smartphones, tablets, Ipads to the

children

at a very young age to play some games and

then

its

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uncontrollable

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them to avoid

these gadget

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. Some

children

play computer games

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the whole night, they get lost

behind

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the games and

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leads them to

take

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a serious

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decision

where

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they

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may commit suicide.

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- some years back there was

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Online Game called "Blue

whales

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' and many students committed suicide

due to

that game.

This

is of course a negative part of using

these equipment

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. As per my knowledge and experience if we as parents give our proper time to our

children

at their right age, keep up the bonding, regular talks with them, ease of using

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and restricted time slots for it, more focus on physical activities and mix up with other

children

will help to overcome the negative aspect of

this

technologies.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

370 words

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