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It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

#women #men
It is generally believed that
women
 are better at bringing up a
child
 than
men
. While
men
 do have a significant role in the upbringing of a
child
 it is
women
 who are most likely considered to be adept at
child
-rearing. In my opinion, the role of
mothers
 is crucial in the character building and development of a
child
.
Women
 are more capable of taking care of their
children
 than
men
. They are multitaskers, more emotionally stable and patient and
this
 is necessary for the early stages of
child
 development. Not to forget the excruciating ordeal they go through in bringing a
child
 to the world which is beyond comprehension for a man.
Children
 do have an emotional connection to their
mothers
 because of the time they spend in a mother’s womb. In most ,families it's observed that
children
 always turn to their moms to confide their feelings and for emotional support. So, to reiterate
women
 are a necessary presence in a
child
's life.
Conversely
, in many societies
fathers
 are considered to be the breadwinners of a family. Many
children
 consider having a masculine figure in their life as reassuring and depend on their
fathers
 to teach them skills
such
 as cycling, fishing or any sports activities.
However
,
mothers
 are not restricted to gender roles ,unlike
fathers
. All these outdoor activities can be taught by a mother, but
men
 may not have the knack to change diapers or soothe a crying baby as
women
 do.
Mothers
 are always ready to sacrifice their food, sleep and comfort for their
children
 if the need arises irrespective of time. In conclusion,
women
 are more efficient in
child
-rearing than
men
. While
fathers
 do play a role in the upbringing of
children
, I feel that
women
 are better caretakers and contribute more to the character development of a
child
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • child-rearing
  • caregiver
  • social constructs
  • nurturing
  • gender roles
  • stereotypes
  • paternity leave
  • co-parenting
  • development
  • economic pressures
  • primary caregiver
  • gender biases
  • fluidity of roles
  • societal norms
  • inherent differences
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